Imagine that you're on an airplane.
Perhaps you're sleeping. But probably you're not, because the airplane is supposed to land in San Francisco soon. You can look out the window to the beautiful San Francisco bay.
And then the plane just jerks, and you're jolted back and forth. It's too strong to be a minor turbulence or small issue like that. It hits you that the plane is crashing and stuff like this is only supposed to happen in movies and it's surreal and scary and --
Such an incident recently happened on Saturday as the Boeing 777 jet crashed at the San Francisco international airport, with two reported dead. One article discussing this topic is Asiana plane crash victim may have been hit by a rescue vehicle from The Guardian.
First of all, I believe the title of the article is misleading. I expected to find an article exploring the details of the death in the title, but in reality, only the first few paragraphs are about this. It briefly explains how in the airplane crash, two girls were killed: Ye Mengyuan and Wang Linjia. However, it seems as if one of them did not actually die from the crash, but from a secondary incident. Specifically, authorities believe that she might have been run over by a vehicle. However, this is all speculating. The article states that, "An autopsy is expected to be completed on Monday that will determine whether the Chinese teenager's death was caused by injuries sustained in the crash or a secondary incident." In other words, no one really knows.
The rest of the article then veers away with to the topic in the title and goes on to discuss the technicalities of the crash - the pilot, the possible causes, and events leading up to it. From what I can gather, the pilot was extremely experienced with flying other planes but was only in training with flying the Boeing 777. In the minutes leading up to the crash, the plane was slowing down, and the pilot tried to abort, but it was too late. People do not know whether it was an issue with equipment yet.
In conclusion, a lot about the actual circumstances about this flight is unknown. Despite this, it is interesting note that The Guardian is teeming with several articles on the same topic for anyone who wants to know more.
Hi Joanne!
ReplyDeleteI would first like to point out that your tone in the fourth paragraph was a bit insensitive and unfitting for an analysis of such a tragedy.
Also, though the first three paragraphs were interesting, they seem unnecessary for this commentary assignment.
On the other hand, I liked that you included an "in conclusion" paragraph at the end to sum up the main idea.
Hi Joanne!
ReplyDeleteI would like to start off by saying that the small narrative is an interesting little story to make the reader to feel like they are in the scene of the Asiana plane crash; however, it is a bit unnecessary if you do not complete it.
In addition, I think that you do not really express strong emotions towards this tragic incident. However, you did explain the situation with great commentaries and avoided to sound like a summary.
P.S. Your "Introduction: This is who I am" is very amusing and proper of you^^
Anyways, good job, Joanne!
I really enjoyed the first three paragraphs. It made me feel as if i was there with them and gave me a new perspective to how they might have felt at the time. Good job on quoting the article and properly siting the information. Overall, you explained the article really well and I enjoyed reading it.
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